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When I used to edit for a living, I earned the moniker The Death Star because I can be a tad ruthless with prose. Today I hope to teach you guys to be a bit ruthless as well. Before we get started, I do have a quick favor to ask. Some of you may know that I practice Brazilian Jiu Jitsu so I’ve taken on our dojo’s blog to see if we can try out new and fun content and am using the moniker Dojo Diva.

I posted about how hard it is to begin and the fears that can ever keep us from starting. The way others try to stop us from doing anything remarkable. I’d love to hear your thoughts and stories, so I hope you will stop by and get the discussion going.

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Not Knowing…

It’s Steam of Conciousness Saturday! The Prompt for today is:

….use a word, anywhere in your post, that begins with the prefix “de-.” Extra points if your word ends with “ed”! It’s all about the fun – have some!

socs-badgeBen-Josephesus is determined to boo and hiss, point and glare, and be one of the crowd at this afternoon’s crucifixion on the hill called Skull. He despises the mealy-mouthed man and his silent replies given to accusations  of blasphemy, and so, …he participated earlier in the curses of the Romans and jeers of his people. Now, as he follows the Nazarene who lumbers up the rocks, falls face down under the weight of that cross hewn from the wood of a mighty tree, (and still does not open his mouth in defense or beg for mercy) Ben-Josephesus reaches down for a hand of gravel and pummels the man whose blood already soaks him.  He deserves to die a cruel death. He has deceived many Jews, most of them ordinary fisherman, women, and those vile sinners who are not worthy of Jehovah’s notice.

The noon hour approaches as soldiers nail him to the wood, this man who preaches mercy and forgiveness of sin. They plug long steel nails into his hands and feet. There, now…they finally lift him high to hang until sundown. It is the Day of Preparation. Passover and the Sabbath are about to begin. At home, Ben-Josephesus’ wife  prepares the lamb that was sacrificed.  (Home, where she should be.)     Not like these women who stand a short way from the cross and mourn with cries and sobs like those of the lambs tied to two crossed poles,  heads up, shoulders fastened to the cross pole so the fires do not reach their head or scorch their unclean brains. Only a clean lamb can be sacrificed to Jehovah.

Three hours pass and the man who claims he is the Lamb of God lifts His own head towards heaven and speaks, ” Forgive them Father, for they know not what they do.” Then he slumps, whispers, It is Finished and breathes a last sigh.

The women move closer to the Cross; they wait for him, whom they love, to be removed and laid down so they can prepare his desecrated body for burial. Their Day of Preparation. The sky darkens, no sun, no moon. Only three o’clock, thought Ben-Joseph. The earth shakes and rocks fall. He hurries home to his wife, ready to begin his Sabbath… not knowing what he has done.

Join in the fun of SOC! The link to the page

http://lindaghill.com/2015/04/03/the-friday-reminder-and-prompt-for-socs-april-415/

Here are the rules:

1. Your post must be stream of consciousness writing, meaning no editing, (typos can be fixed) and minimal planning on what you’re going to write.

2. Your post can be as long or as short as you want it to be. One sentence – one thousand words. Fact, fiction, poetry – it doesn’t matter. Just let the words carry you along until you’re ready to stop.

3. There will be a prompt every week. I will post the prompt here on my blog on Friday, along with a reminder for you to join in. The prompt will be one random thing, but it will not be a subject. For instance, I will not say “Write about dogs”; the prompt will be more like, “Make your first sentence a question,” or “Begin with the word ‘The’.”

4. Ping back! It’s important, so that I and other people can come and read your post! For example, in your post you can write “This post is part of SoCS:” and then copy and paste the URL found in your address bar at the top of this post into yours.  Your link will show up in my comments, for everyone to see. The most recent pingbacks will be found at the top.

5. Read at least one other person’s blog who has linked back their post. Even better, read everyone’s! If you’re the first person to link back, you can check back later, or go to the previous week, by following my category, “Stream of Consciousness Saturday,” which you’ll find right below the “Like” button on my post.

6. Copy and paste the rules (if you’d like to) in your post. The more people who join in, the more new bloggers you’ll meet and the bigger your community will get!

7. Have fun!

say “Write about dogs”; the prompt will be more like, “Make your first sentence a question,” or “Begin with the word ‘The’.”

4. Ping back! It’s important, so that I and other people can come and read your post! For example, in your post you can write “This post is part of SoCS:” and then copy and paste the URL found in your address bar at the top of this post into yours.  Your link will show up in my comments, for everyone to see. The most recent pingbacks will be found at the top.

5. Read at least one other person’s blog who has linked back their post. Even better, read everyone’s! If you’re the first person to link back, you can check back later, or go to the previous week, by following my category, “Stream of Consciousness Saturday,” which you’ll find right below the “Like” button on my post.

6. Copy and paste the rules (if you’d like to) in your post. The more people who join in, the more new bloggers you’ll meet and the bigger your community will get!

7. Have fun!